Monday, October 7, 2013

Show Don't Tell: Can You Explain That?

"Show, don't tell." If you're a writer, you've probably heard this as advice from other writers and read about it in craft books many, many times. I was recently asked to explain it to a new writer, but after using a few "for instances", I decided to find something that would do a better job of describing it.

Here's an excellent article by Erin over at Daily Writing Tips.  If you're new to writing, this information will help you clearly understand how to show and not tell! By the way, I just discovered Daily Writing Tips, and it's a great place to find answers for any writing questions you may have!

Show, Dont Tell 

Anyone who’s ever written a short story or taken a freshman composition course has heard the words “show, don’t tell.”

I know those words can be frustrating. You might not know exactly what “show, don’t tell” means. Or you might believe that you are showing when you’re really telling.

While “telling” can be useful, even necessary, most people don’t realize how vital “showing” is to an effective story, essay, or even a blog post. Showing allows the reader to follow the author into the moment, to see and feel and experience what the author has experienced. Using the proper balance of showing and telling will make your writing more interesting and effective.

“Okay, I get it,” you’re thinking. “But how do I do it? How do I bring more ‘showing’ into my writing?”

I’m glad you asked. Here are some tips that will help make your writing more vivid and alive for your reader.

1. Use dialogue
This is probably one of the first things I talk to my students about when I have them write personal essays. Dialogue allows the reader to experience a scene as if they were there. Instead of telling the reader your mom was angry, they can hear it for themselves:
“Justin Michael,” mom bellowed, “Get in here this instant!”
Dialogue can give your reader a great deal about character, emotion and mood.

2. Use sensory language
In order for readers to fully experience what you’re writing about, they need to be able to see, hear, taste, smell and touch the world around them. Try to use language that incorporates several senses, not just sight.

3. Be descriptive
I’m sure everyone remembers learning to use adjectives and adverbs in elementary school. When we’re told to be more descriptive, it’s easy to go back to those things that we were taught. But being descriptive is more than just inserting a string of descriptive words. It’s carefully choosing the right words and using them sparingly to convey your meaning.
The following example is from a short story I wrote.

Telling: He sits on the couch holding his guitar.

There’s nothing wrong with that sentence. It gives the reader some basic information, but it doesn’t create an image. Compare that sentence with this:

Showing: His eyes are closed, and he’s cradling the guitar in his arms like a lover. It’s as if he’s trying to hold on to something that wants to let go.

The second example takes that basic information and paints a picture with it. It also uses figurative language—in this case, the simile “cradling the guitar in his arms like a lover”—to help create an image.

When using description, it’s important not to overdo it. Otherwise, you can end up with what I call “police blotter” description. For example:
He was tall, with brown hair and blue eyes. He wore a red shirt and jeans, and a brown leather jacket.

4. Be specific, not vague
This is another one I’m constantly reminding my college students about. Frequently, they will turn in essays with vague, fuzzy language. I’m not sure if they think this type of writing sounds more academic, but all it really does is frustrate the reader.

Instead of writing, “I had never felt anything like it before in my entire life,” take the time to try and describe what that feeling was, and then decide how best to convey that feeling to the reader. Your readers will thank you for it.

Hope this information from Daily Writing Tips is useful. If you're a seasoned writer, have you had to explain "show, don't tell" to a novice?  If you're new to writing, have ever had questions about it?

Thanks for visiting and have a great week!


Old Kitty said...

Thanks for this handy tutorial, Maria! Always worth keeping in mind! I've had show don't tell told to me many many times! LOL! Take care

Shelly said...

I taught this for many years to middle schoolers, but it still doesn't make the practice of it any easier! Great tips-

William Kendall said...

Excellent tips, Maria, particularly in using sensory responses.

Norma said...

I once had a "Show Don't Tell" rubber stamp made for my first editor. It was in the Editor's Survival Kit I sent her, along with a big bottle of Screwitol....

Jennette Marie Powell said...

Seems like someone did ask me about this once, and I tild them to focus on what the character thinks and feels (both tactile and emotions). But sometimes it's useful to just summarize or make a fast-cut. Good post!

Maria said...

Hey, daily writing tips is a great blog, thanks for pointing it out. I've bookmarked it. Show don't tell - I can tell when others need to do it, but not when I do :(

Maria McKenzie said...

@Kitty: I'm rewriting stuff from years ago and it's amazing how much telling I did!

@Shelly: Thanks, Shelly! Yeah, it can be a hard concept to grasp.

@William: Thanks, William! I always have to go back and layer in the sensory stuff.

@Norma: You are too much!

@Jennette: Explaining the thinking and feeling of characters are great ways to "show" in writing!

@Maria: Hi, Maria! It is a great site that I just happened to stumble upon;)!

Intangible Hearts said...

Some authors suggest less adjectives and adverbs and yet others use them in every paragraph. It can certainly be bewildering.

Maria McKenzie said...

Hi, Eve,
What you said is so true!